2007 Form Challenges
#18 English Quintain

This is a popular form of Quintain having no set measure or foot and has a rhyming scheme of a. b. a. b. b.
The fields we have planted
Have ripened slowly to a golden husk.
Soon they will be harvested.
The air will be rich with wheaten musk
Then once more the field will return to dust.

Ryter Roethicle

The Quintain is an excellent base to work from for any longer poem (for example ballads). Two stanza, and we have a Sonnetina Cinque and several poets have added two couplets to two quintains in various ways and made a sonnet, although three Quintains could still qualify as a sonnet (with a tail).


English Quintain
Challenge Replies

Maryse Achong

Is Crismas
Thankfulness
Unmasked

Lorainne Dafney

Busy Bees
Natures

Peggy Nelson

Christmas And New Year Blessings
Wishes For You

Ryter Roethicle

Claire de Lune
Fools Paradise
Love Dreams
Lunar Ballet
Magic
Quantum Spirit
Quiescence
Solar Power
Starting with a kiss
Twilight Thoughts
Windscreen Reflections

Leny Roovers

Death-song
Growth
Pranayama
Reflections
Rotterdam 1940
Storm
Touching
Twilights Peace
Watching
Winter Birds

Dinah Serritelli

Images

Nicola Wynter

Brownie
Elemental
Prisoner
Red Sun
Yuletide



Maryse Achong

Is Crismas

Is Crismas time an Ah happy
Cos Ah love dis time of de year,
Dough Ah does get melancholy
When Ah tink of does who eh here,
An Ah cyah help buh shed ah tear.

Ah does really miss meh Fadder
An udder loved ones who have gorn
Dere’s nuttin dat I wud radder
Dan to have dem here Crismas morn
To celebrate how Jesus born.

Buh dis is time for thanksgivin
For de blessins dat come our way
A time for lovin and forgivin
As we honour dis special da.

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Thankfulness

I made a list the other day,
No ‘to do’ list this I might add,
But rather an attempt to weigh
The pros and cons, the good and bad
My reasons to be joyful, sad.

The list was long I must confess
It was not easy to prepare;
As I attempted to assess
My position, it became clear
I am quite happy t’would appear.

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Unmasked

We come before You as we are,
No frills no clever words to say,
Completely bare, each wound each scar
Open to You, we’re on display;
We bow our heads and look away.

No way to whitewash our misdeeds,
To justify the wrongs we’ve done;
Then You show us how Your Heart bleeds;
Though we may deny You or shun
Your Presence, still we cannot run.

We may know You by different names
It matters not You answer all,
And though we still play silly games
You pick us up when’er we fall.

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Lorainne Dafney

Busy Bees

In fields of gold below the sky
bees live and work in harmony
pollinating crops when they fly
thanks to their generosity
come celebrate each days bounty.

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Natures

Ice will soon cover autumns leaves
months before the warmth of springs thaw
encased beauty is left to freeze
mosaic patterns on earths floor
remain beneath a frozen door

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Peggy Nelson

Christmas And New Year Blessings

May the beauty of Christmas astound,
Filling your hearts with warmth and Love
In a glorious splendor of joy all around.
Best wishes for the Holidays and lots of
Blessings sent to you from God up above

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Wishes For You

Our Wishes and Dreams for this years Christmas Season
Bring pleasant, joyful times for you and those who love you
May Love and sharing surround you throughout the Holiday Season
May the dreams, wishes and love you hold so dearly close to you,
Always surround you throughout the New Year’s Season’s too.

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Ryter Roethicle

Claire de Lune

The moonlight shines on singing waters
A chorus repeated by humming stones
In a composition of competing meters
That brings peace to my stressed bones
On hearing a piano’s soft sensuous tones.

Feeling the presence of those supple fingers
And under the spell of each nights moon
There is always the wish for it to linger
For tis not hard for two souls to attune
As nightly this music flows in the room.

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Fools Paradise

Some joker is whistling for his dog
And overhead the moon looks bored.
A thought occurs to me in this fog
That maybe this is heaven’s reward
Not for lack of sin, but life unexplored.

So maybe there are angels lurking
Dressed in every scary thing that be.
Hiding in every shadow, waiting
Ready to jump out and surprise me
Trying to shake this passive lethargy.


I walk under a giant old elm tree
That is rotting from the inside out.
I wonder if they think this of me?
Then suddenly in my mind is doubt.
Suddenly I want to scream and shout.

Life is not about feeling safe within
Rather it’s about testing water’s heat,
Not by finger’s touch, but jumping in.
At life’s end handing back battered meat
With a sign saying, “My life’s complete”.

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Love Dreams

Dreaming of the romance of this night
Dark blue skies, form a stars back drop
The beauty, the lure of the full moonlight.
Sitting on a seawall at some exotic stop
Barely touching as love slowly develops

Magically, soft, wet lips, light our fuse
Senses lost giving in to our feelings
Touching, surrender, as control we lose
Naked bodies, our senses reeling
Opening, giving, nothing concealing

In turn offering ourselves in love
Now with no thoughts of self or same
Becoming a pure, loving treasure trove
And with that love I cry your name
We have created an everlasting flame.

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Lunar Ballet

I lie awake with the stars out on stage.
The moon moves along like a dancer
Moving gracefully from page to page.
Each one pirouettes her, then steadies her
All cast off, until, just she is standing there.

Now the moon completely owns the sky
The stage is hers and we the audience look
As have not others in all the years gone by?
Even the most hardened heart has not forsook
To pause a while amazed how long they took.

Such is the power the moon holds over us all
And so she has for millions of years or more
The Sun is king; she has the ability to enthral.
Poets and writers, have created all this lore
But simply put, the Moon we all adore.

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Magic

No more is it the time of magic, its now of men
Merlin and all his kin have left the stage and sleep
Slumbering in their cave awaiting until when
Once more they must emerge from sleep so deep
Working spells, as evil from the land they sweep

Then once again in battle we will see the way
The strength of arm with sword, or axe and shield,
Again the mighty kings must field and fight the fey
And blow for blow, and spell for spell, or yield
For in the end the weaker magic will lose the field.

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Quantum Spirit

In an increasing circle of yellow light,
He pierces the dark world of his children-
Entering the world, scattering night.
Blackness vanishes from the world of men
And for a while the slate is clean again.

Somewhere there is controlled darkness,
There light and truth cannot penetrate,
And hatred grows in a festering mess.
The men who live there silently wait
Feeding out lies, deceit, and teaching hate.

Too many are aware preferring love instead
For it is mans way to look towards the Sun
And anything dark to feel fear or dread
The coward would merely turn and run,
But the hero says the day has just begun.

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Quiescence

The sky is dark outside but I see your eyes
Shining brighter than any star could ever,
To me, it will never ever be a surprise.
Finally I am glad that you did discover
At last, that we will be together forever.

Outside the night creatures create their sounds
Whilst we mortals inside have made our own.
Now in satient state listen to feathered clowns
Smiling, realising how, close we have grown
And thankful also for their friendly drone.

Finally the world is still as we slumber
Even the avian’s outside contribute nought.
Mortals such as we sleep and remember
In our dreams all that tonight has bought
Probably everything in Eternity we sought.

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Solar Power

The young sun is a child no more, instead
He has learned his craft in spring, and now
Rising early he calls us all from comfy bed
To share as much together as time will allow
Hoping he has learned what he needs to know.

He has four cousins they are the winds
Who he uses in the lessons taught by time.
When they blow we bless or curse, or remind
That the sun has at last reached its prime.
We must be careful to watch each daily climb.

For those that are foolish and ignore each ray
Will soon find out what sun block means,
See those lumps appear and they rue the day
They exposed themselves to solar schemes
And a surgeons knife destroyed their dreams.

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Starting With A Kiss

“Should I kiss thee?” I think looking into your eyes
Knowing what we have started can never end.
Knowing that with the kiss and loving sighs
Our love will be forever, never need to mend,
Starting with a kiss as now upwards we ascend.

I have kissed thee, and looked into your eyes
Now what has happened I hope never ends
For I know thy kisses and thy loving sighs
Forever, loving, and never needing amends,
Starting with a kiss as now upwards we ascend.

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Twilight Thoughts

As twilight begins to dim the evening sky
You hear the birds giving their final calls.
The wind in the trees echoes daytime’s sigh
Seeing shadows lengthen as suns light falls
And the sun disappears down blackened walls

Finally the sun sets and daylight is gone.
And daytime scenes disappear with the light
Sentient familiars standing, waiting the dawn
As references change to become those of night
Then tactile senses replace those of sight.

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Windscreen Reflections

Shaded trails of asphalt filled promise
I pushed time in one end of today,
And saw how those promises diminish
Like the red cars that pass, I am in the way
And my marvellous thoughts easily decay.

Flashing bands of what has mattered
Are ignored and pushed well out of sight
By impatient, ill bred cretins in well catered
Four wheeled drives impressed by might,
With little though for others, or what is right.


Patiently I spur my horseless carriage on
Carving my way through fume infested track
Wondering if this time, I will see the dawn
Before I have to turn round and head on back
Or attempt to get off, and take another tack.

Suddenly I’m free and can move at my pace
What heat there was is now a flowing breeze.
Brooding cameras prevent the thought of race
And the clear road ahead only serves to tease.
None too soon, a leafy street is there to please.

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Leny Roovers

Death-song

As words turned into razorblades that stuck
into the softness of my throat- it bled.
My heart had been wide open, strings were plucked
until they almost broke- I shared your dread,
had looked Death in his face before, awe-struck.

Our bodies are like blades of grass, minute,
cut off before there is a chance to bloom.
And if we live to flower and bear fruit,
our roots can be attacked by creeping doom;
no time to taste these fruits- Death takes the loot

. As pain is etched into the flesh of life,
each nerve-end screams for mercy and respite;
yet Death will wield the hot blade of his knife,
until your body has fulfilled his rites.

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Growth

As bone is eaten slowly from within,
your muscles wither, can’t support your weight;
you fight a battle you can hardly win-
this illness attacks all, the small and great.
Is there no distinction, is it just fate?

The pains are not as bad as they begin;
they come in peaks and then they will abate,
but all too soon they creep under your skin,
and trembling bones get brittle as they grate.
Is it bad luck, or just to clean your slate?

There’s no way out, you have to face this fiend
and trust this painful lesson leaves you cleaned.
You’ll leave this life much lighter in the end-
this enemy might proof to be your friend.

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Prănayăma

I feel the flow of breath reach its six ways
as it spreads slowly outwards from my core-
an even stream of Prăna, till it stays
in throat’s still lock- I then exhale once more.
To witness breathing clears an inner door.

Each inhalation straightens out my spine,
it brings the air into my arms and legs
as from my sit-bones to the seventh shrine
clear Prăna flows along my Nadi’s pegs-
I watch breath rise and fall in perfect eggs.

While different mudras lead the inner air
to certain stages of the stream of life,
I’m faintly hearing Ujai breathing’s fife.
Attention on my breath turns into prayer.

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Reflections VI

I see the lines time’s pen drew in my skin
as sorrow and oft laughter made their mark.
At first unnoticed, spider’s threads begin
to slowly trail from crow’s-feet deeper arc;
the mirror shows me new ones- born when dark.

The eyes still seem the same, they do not age,
though life and love bore insight from sharp pain;
my still reflection tells me a new page
‘s been turned as peace softens tears’ furrowed strain.
Awareness deep within now holds the reins.

I watch my face with love, as a dear friend,
yet living in the world, bound to transcend.

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Rotterdam 1940

As cruel hands pull out your beating heart,
its arteries no longer bear your blood.
Your body crumples when your soul must part-
another life is smothered in its bud.
All red is rinsed away in heaven’s flood.

Once you stood proud, your arms embraced the world,
but envious eyes shot poisoned darts your way;
your strength grew weaker as more bombs were hurled
and it was clear you wouldn’t see the day.
Why does the end of love sets off to betray?

An empty shell raises his arms up high,
it all began when death turned black our sky.

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Storm

With angry fists Storm beats my windowpanes,
rattles the roof-tiles, whistling his fierce tune;
his cold breath creeps in small cracks, chilling veins.
Behind groaning trees, a sliver of Moon
shows her face, swallowed by clouds all too soon.

In staccato rhythm rain drenches all;
dark shapes of people, huddled up in capes,
lean into the wind, are kept in Storm’s thrall.
The whole world is crying, nothing escapes,
as icy fingers tear shrouds into scrapes.

Inside, I turn up the heating and sound;
my cats cuddle close, afraid of the noise,
even the small one, my queen of great poise,
leans into my neck- her tail curls around.

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Touching

Grey covers of fat clouds obscure the Sun,
his rays of light and warmth can't reach my land,
while days get shorter since summer's brief run.
In long winter months his touch has been banned,
I miss his comfort and caressing hand.

A small strip of light for just a few hours,
is all the solace now left for my soul;
there is no pleasure from spring's bright flowers
as they lay dormant, in seasons' control,
awaiting their key to play a new role.

For four long months these stifling blankets shroud
Sun's face- his warm embrace is not allowed.

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Twilight's Peace

While twilight ends this cold and too short day,
I listen to a weeping flute’s lament.
As cloud-ships in full sails take thoughts away,
clear voices send their prayers on joy’s ascent
And peace of dusk then covers day’s torment.

As night’s soft arms embrace eve’s rosy clouds,
I hear storm’s whistle in the trees outside;
sharp contoured houses wear a mist of shrouds.
As sounds of strife and laughter both subside,
The Lord of Night bids welcome to his bride.

They watch the golden stars on sky’s soft black
and follow trails of comets on their track.
Their dreaming transforms all our offered pain,
in exchange for a chance to start again.

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Watching

There is a silent watcher in my mind,
investigating every wisp of thought.
Among the bits and pieces that he finds
are faded threads of dreams, no longer sought-
once brought to light, they vanish into naught.

As breath flows in, my chest expands with air;
each cavity is filled with living force
while outward sighs give birth to silent prayer.
I am connected to my inner source,
In deep surrender I now trust Thy course.

Enveloped by clear consciousness I rest,
in confidence I'll one day pass Thy test.

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Winter Birds

Amidst red finches and blue tits,
my solitary robin waits;
capped bramblings search for favoured bits,
greenfinches scurry with their mates
as friend blue jay samples spilt dates.

Bold jackdaws chase green parakeets,
swinging from long peanut chains;
newcomers in our cities’ streets,
they’ve taken over parks and plains-
competing now with beaks and brains.

My lonely robin still awaits
sweet reuniting with its mate.
All summer long they were a pair,
yet wintertime they cannot share.

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Dinah Serritelli

Images

I smile at the images that fill my head
Sitting comfy cozy in my favorite chair,
Through my memory maze I softly tread
My mind roaming from here to there
Shuffling around with nary a care

I’ll keep the good…discard the bad
Shred the thoughts that made me cry
Living with regrets is just way to sad
Better to leave the sleeping dogs lie,
Why? I’d rather be happy…that’s why.

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Nicola Wynter

Brownie

"You need much help dearest lass."
Says the tawny good elf lad,
So he puts the wine glass
In front of her to make glad
Her sorrowed eyes, no more sad.

He set about her old home
Like a train passing through night
And left a trail of gnomes
To guard her treasures right
And cleaned away the dirt in sight.

Now the lass is smiling fine
To find her home clean in time
For the lad that came to call
To win her hearts treasure all.

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Elemental

The wind touched my soul and said,
"Now is my time, now not yours."
Rain fell not in sheets, not lead
Me to believe it was ours,
Just the way nature rules hours.

#2

Ocean felt her face, so she sighed
And cried "who and what are you ?"
Enveloped as in a dream, shy
Yet curiously drawn for true,
The ocean met human thus, too.

#3

Sand tickled her feet when she ran,
Ran from the seas embraces,
Found she couldn't see these ones,
Only to find herself in traces
Of the same feelings, same places.

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Prisoner

Never made a wish of dreams
That would take me prisoner now
A prisoner of mind, it seems,
It seems dreams have become low
To real to stop reeling that blow.

To this wish of a love so pure
That only time could make it gone,
Take it away without a sure
Point of return within the dawn,
The dawn of new times forgone,
New times swan of days withdrawn.

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Red Sun

Now that I'm warm I'll recall
Early Octobers sun was red
The orange and gold and all
Coppery at days end, I said,
"How God paints the earths kindred!"

His call to us so plainly shows
What we miss if ignored by
The by, as nature brings low
Creation, as we pause to sigh
At the beauty recalled, n'er why.

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Yuletidings

Light comes up so very rosy and gay
Like potpourri of dry posies in vase,
Of gilded blue glass full of starry rays
That tell the tidings of this days grace
For Christmas morn has come to show its face.

And this gift belongs to this very day,
The blessings of a new birth, good new ways.

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