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2009 Form Challenges

#5 Go Vat

The French Influence can be seen in this one, where there is a longer syllable count and a repeat line or word, and is believed to have become a popular form in the late 1800s.
It consists of a couplet of usually eight syllables, which sets the rhyme for the subsequent stanzas, and a third line which can be repeated totally or phrase or just the final word.
O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. a.
O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. a.
O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. B.

O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. a.
O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. a.
O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. O. B.

My spirit

My spirit is no longer part of me
I gave it away to you most willingly
Together with my heart.

I would share it all with thee
And boast for all the world to see
Willingly giving you my heart.

Tell me of your love I will agree
And share my life to infinity
See again I offer you my heart.

Isnít love the most simplistic plea
Showing you are open and free
Infinity calls let's share one heart.

Ryter Roethicle

Today poets are a little more relaxed and because English is not a naturally rhyming language, began using a different rhyming couplet and ignoring the syllable count. Whilst purists may frown at this, some advocates of this form would argue that it widens the range of subject matter, and could even enter areas once used only by balladeers and similar forms. Kathy Anderson gives a lovely example of the modern form.

Before

When black candles melt down hours,
Do nothing to lessen lours
Before the pills put down the angst of lies.

When dawns dreams seem to be a plot,
Make you wish for a better lot
Before the pills put down the angst of lies.

When noon seems gray and life affray,
Can't go out of the house, just stay
Before the pills put down the angst of lies.

When silver spoon is just a tale
You wish only for a dark ale
But only pills put down the angst of lies.

Kathy Anderson



Go Vat Challenge Replies

Maryse Achong

Guan Yin

Divena Collins

This Day of Fools

Jem Farmer

Goddess Returns
Pictures of Silence
Queen of the May

Ryter Roethicle

Exploring Dreams (Modern)
Finding Treasure (Modern)
Give all to love
Loves Tune
Not Broken
Seasons (Modern)
Xong (Complete)
Z Time

Nia Wynne

By Chance (Modern)
For Once (Modern)



Maryse Achong

Guan Yin

"As long as you are kind and there is love in your heart
A thousand hands will naturally come to your aid
As long as you are kind and there is love in your heart
You will reach out with a thousand hands to help others."



A thousand hands that render aid,
Ears that hear ev'ry cry that's made;
The pledge of the Goddess Guan Yin.

When we are worried or dismayed,
Overcome by despair, afraid,
Remember the Goddess Guan Yin.

But what we receive must be paid
Back to others, in a fair trade
Off, so says the Goddess Guan Yin.

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Divena Collins

This Day Of Fools

Back in medieval asylum school,
elders were strict, and could be cruel
on the first of April, this day of fools.

Sent on silly errands for jest,
inmates tried there very best,
on the first of April, this day of fools

This we all still practise today
but in a very much kinder way,
on the first of April, this day of fools.

But when midday, be gone and done,
you be a fool, for making them one.
on the first of April,this day of fools.

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Jem Farmer

Goddess Returns

I closed my eyes so I could see
There is a better path for me,
When spring calls my Goddess returns.

Amid the stones on bended knee,
I felt her touch spread over me,
In honour, my Goddess returns.

Oh Queen of all who has blessed me,
In thy light I'm forever free,
In new life my Goddess returns.

Daffodils trumpet thy glory,
As blossoms shade the cherry tree,
In delight my Goddess returns.

The babbling brook sings to thee,
From the mountain to the valley,
To this world my Goddess returns.

I lay me down so standing free,
And face my own humility,
In my heart my Goddess returns.

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Pictures of Silence

Calling to mind tranquil places,
where the soul meets those embraces
that create my peaceful vision.

Breathing in, slowing life's paces
intense moments knowing graces
I found in my peaceful vision.

Imagined beach, tidal traces
leaving intricate sand laces
on shores of my peaceful vision.

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Rebounding Heart

The taste of love has lingered on,
a brief instant that stayed too long,
rebounding heart that led to you.

Each kiss a lie, a mourning song,
embraced in thought this love is wrong,
rebounding heart that led for you.

A promised tryst did not belong,
between us two when hurts were strong,
rebounding heart that led to you.

No chance to breath or think as one,
just asked for time was given none,
rebounding heart that led to you.

Amid the web of lies you spun,
I smile and see new life begun
my loving heart has closed to you.

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Ryter Roethicle

Exploring Dreams (Modern)

In dreams to great heights you can soar
In dreams, you find great depths galore
But like true love it can only be in dreams

Once you have kissed, your mind can explore
More thoughts, and discover who you adore
But true love need not be in dreams.

I will admit oftimes of you I've dreamt
But those promises and vows I've meant
Like true love need not be in dreams.

Your very presence my senses wildly tempt
Please welcome this lover's shy attempt
And prove my love need not be in dreams.

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Finding Treasure (Modern)

Let us touch for a little while, Eternity is fine
Let our souls mingle, let yours, meet mine.
You have become a treasure in my life.

In that time I hope neither will emerge
Instead I pray that they stay converged
You have become a treasure in my life.

Fate was smiling allowing us to meet
Knowing we make each other complete
You have become a treasure in my life.

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Give all to love

Tonight love reached its peak so far
each time we love, we raise the bar
for true love has set its mark to all.

There is no challenge, no call from afar
as we give all to love and follow our star.
for true love has set its mark to all.

I am reminded there is nought bizarre,
we cannot do with loving for we are
true love that sets its mark to all.

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Loves Tune

Dancing to loves tune, spin and turn
The fever of love causes you to burn
Inside your heartbeat skips and pounds

Your lover's steps you quickly learn
And whilst apart your innards churn.
Inside your heartbeat skips and pounds

Each night to loves dancing we return
Bodies touching as you nightly yearn
Inside your heartbeat skips and pounds

Souls locked in a heavenly sojourn
There's no contest, no points to earn
Inside your heartbeat skips and pounds

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Not Broken

I found a bird with a broken wing
Each morning I had heard her sing
Then found her broken on the floor.

Dawns chorus silenced by something
That did not appreciate spring
And left her broken on the floor.

I loved, and cared and fixed her wing
Now into the sky you see her fling
She's no longer broken on the floor.

My reward is hearing her sing
With music that's fit for any king
Proving she's not broken on the floor.

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Seasons (Modern)

Now we begin a brand new life
Extracted by a drunken midwife
A screaming, messy, painful time

Summer has sweet playful fingers
Memories of first time love lingers
A screaming, messy, pleasured time

Autumn is when the peace begins
Finally love becomes free of sins
Still a messy, pleasurable time

Maturity takes less of a fervour
At the fireside, lovers remember
Those messy, pleasurable times.

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Xong (Complete)

When soft voices die or fade away
Then where are we, what do we say
We must first look into our eyes.

That way all fears we can allay
For they simply bid that I stay
After looking into your eyes.

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Z Time

As the sandwoman closed my eyes
Contentment caused my sighs
Dreams of you and I, tonight.

We were looking at the stars and skies
Then with the evenings soft demise
I dreamt of you and I, tonight.

When you look at me I can't disguise
Feelings of desire you cause to arise
Then I dream of you and I, tonight.

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Nia Wynne

By Chance

You came in the night like a thief,
A Leprechaun with gold relief,
By chance your charm shall bring me luck.

You threw the dice, gave a symbol,
A circle of gold, probable
By chance your charm shall bring me luck.

You gave me some cards telling of
A risk involving games of love,
By chance your charm shall bring me luck.

You thought it was just like roulette,
Yet time to be free without threat,
By chance your charm will bring me luck.

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For Once

All because you are on my mind
At dawn of day new hopes I find,
For once the stars do shine above.

All my divine thoughts are yours now,
The answers sought you whisper how
For once the stars do shine above.

All of time paints loves purple wine
Across horizons lovely shrine,
For us the stars do wink above.

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