Form Challenges #21
RICTAMETER

The Rictameter is a modern poetry form based on the idea of the Cinquain, and its popularity has spread simply because of its functionality without any restrictions apart from its format.
There is no need for rhyme only a strict adherence to syllable count. Like the Cinquain the Rictameter has a two syllable increment with each line, and a two syllable closure. However, the Rictameter does not stop at eight, it has a line of ten syllables, but instead of a two syllable closure it decreases by two syllables per line until the closure. The closure is a repeat of the first line, so it has to be eye catching and definitive.
The syllable count is as follows ..2R..4..6..8..10..8..6..4..2R.

Here is a very basic example:

I think
I'm wasting time
Ignoring the form cause
Of the name, when in actual fact
The form is in my humble opinion
Much betterer than the cinquain
So in the near future
I will write one
I think.

Teagan

As you will see from the examples posted below, there are no restrictions on the genre and it can swing from a simple love note to the blackness of Gothic poetry. In this example you can see how Dera Cymreiges ignores the Refrain so that she can carry on telling a story.

I am the dreamer

Slumber
is a strange world
where the weavers conspire,
exchange tall tales, preposterous
lies and inside straights; each thread is woven
into their looms, creating the
tapestries on which we
feed our muse in
slumber.

This is
the place where priests,
thieves and lovers gather
at the same trough; this is where large
black cats chase slo mo runners, where stones of
intent are thrown in jest, where a
perfect rose crumbles on
touch, shows off its
Uglies

Dera Cymreiges

For the story teller there is a certain freedom. Whist trying to achieve some kind of meter there are no rhyme restrictions. You are only limited to the 60 syllable stanza. The only thing that amazes me is the lack of imagination that most poets show with this form.

Rictameter Posts....Contents

Carly Svamvour

As the Winds Blow
Dragons Lair
First Garden
Rict-A-Meter

Eric Schneider

Alas for ALL our sons
Craving
Grief
Stay Clean?

Etain Druantia

Self-Hate
War

Guinevere

Be Calm
I love
LaPoetessa

Inside a Rictometer

Lorainne Stark

Cello Speaks
Daybreaks
Good Times----Acrostic Rictameter
I Had Enough Mr. Green
Rains Fair---Acrostic Rictameter
Vanity

Gloria Carpenter

Behold

Teagan De Danaan

Erins Sons
Just a little


Carly Svamvour

As the Winds Blow

Winds blow
In from the east
Nudging fruits from their pods,
Down streams, o'er the woodland patches,
Seeding with the ever - so - cautiously
Bred; stamens spread - excite under
Lightning's dev'lish blue flash.
Oh! Let the wild
Winds blow!

-----

Dragons Lair

kitchen,
a vast, loft-like
space where my daughter &
i are cleaning up. she displays
a large rack, the size of a dragon's wing
span; we ponder this thing & I
look 'round, for big ovens,
signs of dragon-
sized pies.

logic
known only to
weavers of dreams, compels
us to think on how we can break
two dinner plates. I move to a door that
opens to reveal not much more
than a shortcut to the
thin air of a
long drop.

oh, but
mom! Try again,
my dream child says and I
step out on to a black metal
stairwell, the soon - to - be - executed
dishware in hand. as they hit dirt,
each breaking in two, one
changes, becomes
opaque

like a
platter, the kind
you place, dead-centre on
the dining room table, under
its matching fruit bowl. I wake with the scent
of warm bread, cheese, and other things
in mind - things you might find
in the dreamer's
kitchen.

-----

First Garden

Without
referring to
the obvious, I think
about how somebody, somewhere
was out gathering for the first mammoth
feed of the season - yes, it had
to be a she - only
a woman would
do such

Under
cover of skin
- something tanned and sewn,
she hid the roots of some veggie
and took it home to ponder. While
the others were masticating,
she went outside the cave
and dug a hole for it.
Next spring? Voila!
Garden.

Fooled 'em,
those men - while they
slaved all day to catch some
sorry thing, wilder than themselves,
the women of the tribe stayed home, gathered
from the newly started garden.
It took the men many
years to catch on.
Clever.

That was,
of course, before
the days when we hammered
the keys of typewriters, sat prim
and proper on our steno chairs while some
man who assured everybody
he knew just what he was
doing, dictated
letters.

Those were
the days when we
women dreamed of how we
would someday run our own places,
send the boys out to fetch coffee, complete
with croissants - latte was a bit
much. Of course, that was back
when coffee was
coffee.

Years on,
we came to dream
of a time when we could
stay home to tend to our gardens,
experiment with roots and cuttings, think
up new ways to work from the home.
Some sold cuttings from their
gardens.

Later
we tired of this;
had a yen to get back
into the workplace - take the men's
jobs. Thought about future scenarios,
wondered if there might come a day
when the men stayed home and we went
out to work. Now we wonder
if we shouldn't have stuck
to our backyard
gardens.

-----

Rict-A-Meter

Quakin'
and shakin', the
earth moves under our feet;
often-times, it's a shudder - one
of those negative magnitude affairs
they say happens once a day, but
sometimes it's a seven
point somethin' that's
quakin'.


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Eric Schneider

Alas for ALL our sons

Alas
The mass of men
And, too, women, who died
From foolish tribal pride, then fell
Leaving mums, dads and kids in hellish grief.
Yes, we remember them so well,
but still play, to our shame,
patriot games.
Alas,


-----

Craving

I've craved
time after time
said, This time it's real love,
then, tightly clutched a heart,
and drowned it in sweet, poisonous passion,
like a fly in the Venus Trap
How much real love I've crushed!
I have not loved
I've craved.


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Grief

I know
No M.R.I.
Cat scan, or x-ray, would
reveal a deep lake of sadness
in fleshly auricles and ventricles.
Yet my most truthful sense must say
that, within my bright heart,
hot tears pool. This
I know.

And, too,
when grief's so strong
words cannot enclose it,
even a poet may strangled
sounds emit, approaching darkness, terror,
howling loneliness, and
haunted regret.
All that.


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Stay Clean?

Stay clean?
They shake their heads,
Laugh about prison times
Like you and I 'bout our school days.
They don't know it can be any different.
Yeah, they've heard about guys like me-
Never nailed, jailed, or bailed.
(How's he do that,
Stay clean?


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Etain Druantia

Self Hate

self-hate
terrible state
anarchy reigns supreme
happiness viewed as far-flung dream
while one tries to play perfectionist's game
guilt interferes to win again
each failure counts as sin
futile debate
self-hate


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War

I loved
once long ago
then war came and he went
proud to fight for (ig)noble cause
while his children and I fought for our lives
no money, little food, heart ache
shaky future beckons
Death claimed the man
I loved

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Guinevere

Be Calm

Be calm
and know tonight
that even Jesus wept
as upward to his mortal brain
shot energy like thorns pierce flesh and bleed
the way of light to shadows plight
of love in backward flow
and too God said,
Be calm.


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I Love

I love
this side of June
for soon the August moon
displays her beauty from within
as we ourselves should honour "show and tell"
till new spring blooms sprout up again
a season of belief
in everything
I love!


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LaPoetessa

Inside a Rictometer

inside
within a shell
the darkness sits inside
my soul inside the place inside
my mind without your care without your love
without a doubt I'm lost inside
this darkend room within
this shell I slip
inside


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War

I loved
once long ago
then war came and he went
proud to fight for (ig)noble cause
while his children and I fought for our lives
no money, little food, heart ache
shaky future beckons
Death claimed the man
I loved

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Lorainne Stark

Cello Speaks

Cello
Svelte in figure
Bow at its side waiting
For Bach's solo to be performed
Hear echoes reign throughout a concert hall
Silent in appreciation
The audience listens
Then applauds the
Cello

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Daybreaks

Daybreaks
With more heartaches
For those who are alone
Sadly like nomads they do roam
Searching to meet the right person to love
Hear their prayers soar beside white doves
Their silhouettes in flight
As I awake
Daybreaks


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Good Times----Acrostic Rictameter

Good times
Out on the town
Once in a while is fun
Dressed up for a night of pleasure
Together we keep the rhythm going
In time to the music dancing
Moving and feeling grand
Enhanced by these
Good times

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I've Had Enough Mr. Green

Screw you
Again screw you
You pompous righteous prick
Each day for twenty four hours
You ostentatious feathered vertebrate
Embarrassing me when you speak
Who do you think you are
Old parakeet
Screw you

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Rains Fair---Acrostic Rictameter

Rains fair
All over town
Inside hallways wet shoes
Nestled on rubber mats laid out
Signatures left from swollen puddles tears
Follow behind in your footprints
Annoying little guys
Impartial drops
Rains fair

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Vanity

Mirrors
Are reflections
Of hidden desires
That capture life without a sound
Suspended expressions and emotions
Stare back at you the director
Upon the glass
Mirrors

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Gloria Carpenter

Behold

come here
give me your hands
now look into my eyes
do you see yourself inside me
gaze deeply penetrating my being
can I swallow you with my eyes
dilated pupils feed
on eye contact
come here

enter
the open gate
a lone tear guides your way
reach out and touch the walls that shield
feel your way then run with free abandon
once you have come you will return
for you know you belong
and can always
enter

tell me
when eyes open
will they remember us
gazing into eternity
when our tears swam together for a time
did they reach the depths of being
behind those sleeping shades
what do they see
tell me
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Teagan De Danaan

Erins Sons....Easter 1916

Fourteen
was the number
of men that died for you,
that day, when England murdered you.
when Patrick Pearse was crossed, to help the
bloody butchers aim and those shots
were heard around the world
freedom needed
fourteen.

And then
Erins sons awoke
too late for Thomas Clarke,
and Thomas Macdonagh, who's deaths
made a mockery of English justice
who's only aim was to further
England's greed for
power.


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Just a Little

Tonight
be a little
patient with me please.
I'm a little sad and lonely.
Deep within I feel a little too quiet
the empty stillness is the thing
memories of summer
and days long past
Tonight

Summer
when life was full
the possibilities
of things to be discovered
and of all the joys to be unleashed
but some of us do fall away
sometimes it's a little dark
when all's left is
Winter

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