LUC-BAT

An interesting form using the Vietnamese Luc-Bat and presenting it in the form of a sonnet. Luc-Bat means six-eight, referring to the syllabic count in the lines.
The poem consists of six and eight syllable counts.
The first line starts with six syllables the next line has eight. The sixth syllable of the second line must rhyme with the first line of the previous line and the eighth rhyme with the last line of the next line which is six syllables again. The final octasyllable line rhyming with the first line. I think you can see the French influence here.
Thus we end up with a 14 line rhyme pattern a. (a.x.b) b. (b.x.c)..etc..g. (g.x.a)

The Piper at the Gates of Dawn #5

When the world is new born
Sun's scattered seeds are sown and fall
On ground no good at all
Yet see some fruit grow tall and lush
Berries ripe on every bush.
And other life forms push through earth
As day starts giving birth
Playing, wondering the worth of man
Why the Gods created Pan
How he fits in the plan or scheme
What's the heavenly dream?
Wondering is their theme a jest
As the sun finds earths crest
You harken to him best at dawn.

Ryter Roethicle

Luc Bat Contents

Lori Martin

Butterflies Dance
Driftwood
Tongue In Cheek

Leny Roovers

Beasts of Terror
Close to me
Dreams of You
On the Plane
You and Me
Your Love

Ryter Roethicle

Pan. A Quintet of Luc Bat Sonnets
Wine

David Uootem

Daydream Clouds
One More Sigh to Show
Sunset (to a lost lover)


Song That Luc Bat

Ryter Roethicle

Dawn
Time for sleep


That Ngon Luc Bat

Leny Roovers

Refrain
Work


Luc Bat

Lori Martin

Butterflies Dance

Butterflies dance, knees quake,
restless, disturbed, awake, I wait,
for Life has shown my Fate
and so to future mate I fly,
not once to question why.
Mom sighed when I said bye to her,
but knows our love is pure;
yes, my heart is quite sure of him-
this is no foolish whim.
Green eyes meet blue, both brim with love,
one lifetime not enough
True love stands out above the rest-
we passed this trying test...
Now two as one our nest we make.

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Driftwood

We've drifted beyond reach
lonely wood on a beach of tears
misshapen by life's fears,
accumulated years of pain
grounded by tides again
worn down by driving rain, fierce breeze,
relentless, tossing seas
bursting in waves do tease and play
lunge at bleached bones each day
unmoved we keep away from light
shadows hide, dim clear sight
blind to hope shining bright, dead beech.

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Tongue In Cheek

"Here's a new challenge for you.
Post your attempt when through with it."
Don't throw creative fit-
just work on it bit by bit, just try,
no need for being shy.
Don't bother asking why, just do.
I write mine on the loo.
Some good, some bad, all true they are;
right folded some fly far.
Then there's those in the car I write,
now those are rather trite.
Yet still I post my blight online-
you'll always say it's fine,
you'd never dare my rhymes eschew.

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Leny Roovers

Beasts of Terror

In a dark, starless sky
Creatures of the night cry loudly
The sound is troubling me
Why don't they let me be this night?
Instead of causing fright
In this dark without light I hear
Shrieks of terror I fear
Knowing life is so dear to those
For whom death might be close
Life is a prickly rose at best
Its beauty mixed with jest
Until all comes to rest at last
And fear will then be past
I know the die is cast tonight
I hear the screams of fright
The beasts of terror light the sky.

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Close to me

I want to hold you close
Enfold you like a rose its stem
Protect you like a clam
Will shield its inner gem from hurt
Thus keep it free from dirt
By power or by word of force
And without much remorse
I shall uphold my source of love
So peaceful as a dove
Take care that nothing rough will meet
My sweet love's path or lead
Away from me the heat I chose

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Dreams

I dream of you at night
There burns a fire bright in me
Which makes me feel so free
This warming glow will be shared soon
Under a Southern moon
A starry sky a boon of fate
I meet at last my mate
We hope at any rate this much
Shall know for sure on touch
Then we will both know such sweet bliss
Forget that we did miss
To touch and hold and kiss for long
It made our love real strong
Nothing can now go wrong this night.

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On the Plane

Into the night I fly
I hear a baby crying loud
a mother gives a shout
a father takes it out of bed
some older children fret
they just want to be fed some more
though they have been before
flying is but a bore to them
all they can do is dram
the parents cannot hem them in
they look sheepish and grin
when their kids won't finish fast
so it's quiet at last
I slept, some hours passed, I wake
three more it then will take
it's quite a trip I make, no lie!

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Your Love

You are my peace of mind
With you I tend to find my rest
My happiness is best
When you love me with zest so great
We feel it is our fate
To love again this late in life
This time just love, no strife
Into its sea we dive with glee
It's great to feel so free
It's all I want to be today
Carefree and warm, we may
Enjoy this golden ray in kind.

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You and Me

I can feel you in me
Strong threads are between me and you
After all we went through
Love proved to be true at last
We did learn from the past
The hours will go fast until
The day we meet, such thrill
My heart beats so fast, will we match
I can feel my hands stretch
Out to you, when you fetch me from
The airport and welcome
Me, hold me, kiss warmly, see.

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Ryter Roethicle

Pan. A Quintet of Luc Bat Sonnets

1

When the world is new born
Sun's scattered seeds are sown and fall
On ground no good at all
Yet see some fruit grow tall and lush
Berries ripe on every bush.
And other life forms push through earth
As day starts giving birth
Playing, wondering the worth of man
Why the Gods created Pan
How he fits in the plan or scheme
What's the heavenly dream?
Wondering is their theme a jest
As the sun finds earths crest
You harken to him best at dawn.

2

Now, hear his spirits rise
Each time he greets the prize of morn
Out of darkness is torn
Pan's gift of newly born, bright day.
Music helping blow away
Cobwebs of a yesterday of sin
Weakness of human kin
Each fresh morning begin anew
End of night shall bid adieu
Smiling waiting the new daybreaks
Never the same mistakes
But everyone still makes the same
It's the nature of the game
Dawn is a picture frame disguise

3

His finale at last,
All on Earths has passed to musk
The sun's a red dwarf husk
Last time, he plays at dusk his dirge
No more will feelings surge
No more has man the urge to fly
Weary now, time to die.
Nor is there need to cry, it's time.
No sun from the East climb
Life's clock a final chime then murk
Angels have done their work
All that time they didn't shirk and now
He stands, they fly in a row
Honouring as they go silent past

4

Again another bang
Just like the other sprang in site
New Universe fresh light
God shows us his might, again
Cosmos spurting semen
We see new suns begin to glow
New world begin to grow
New life begins to show and form
Life reaches out to warm
See it begin to swarm and play
See him at break of day
The creatures listening sway at morn
Greeting the fresh new dawn
Beast or plant that's born or sprang.

5

Once I heard the piper play
It was the break of day so still
Beasts sitting on the hill
Listening to him until the end
Each united each a friend
Every silhouette did blend just then
Just now Earth is Heaven.
Angels list'ning with men at peace
Just for a while release
Pan has caused a cease to war
See them sit on the floor
How can anyone ignore this fact
Look down, a peaceful act
Why cant they make this pact today

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Wine

Has less effect than you
Your kiss a headier brew, I know So abundant in it's flow
So warming the afterglow I feel
It's affect like wine I reel
Too much, so much appeal so nice
And yet so cheap a price
For this exotic spice, so easy
You fill my glass freely
Offerings made sweetly it's said
From lips like wine so red
Drive senses from our head, until
We have lost all our will
Once again my glass I fill with you.

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David Uootem

Daydream Clouds

clouds shape such dreams of this
whose varied paths in twist of wind
echoed in tree sway bend
new shape becomes old friend I miss
my gaze to sky like this
ever changing a bliss is found
'til mind returns to ground
no pleasure to astound as this

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One More Sigh to Show

hourglass of time fills slow
all things my heart doth know as dear
beget in dreams come near
echoed voice, ancient tear withstood
release them if I could
but I write when pen should be still
of something I still feel
the chant of love so real brings tears
speaks softly in poet's ears
eternal score of years gone by
begets another try
with this poem, one more sigh to show.

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Sunset (to a lost lover)

sunset, day's full tally
rests in obscure valley of mind
and there is peace to find
if heart is not too blind to see
for soul is soon set free
of life's reality once known
when sun's full splendor shown
and love was something known so well
for in hearts did it dwell
but time on day soon fell at last
with love then lost to past
and distance seems so vast to me

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Song That Luc Bat

Ryter Roethicle

Dawn

Summer is now almost gone
I wake and wait for the dawn
hear the birds and their song
how can there any wrong with life.

The air is fresh, full of life
day has not begun its strife
lay back, relax again
before the day and strain begins.

Sun begins its daily round
the cacophony of sound
now invading my rest
even though I've done my best to sleep.

Rising, my day has begun
Summer is now almost gone

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Time for sleep

Its that time of night for sleep
night time dreams of you to keep
so much keeps us apart
it's time for you to start your day

One day we may get it right
and share the same day and night
the same space we will keep
as finally we fall asleep together

Our plans and dreams are the same
together winning this game
by fates rules we abide
you and I side by side always

What love sows we shall reap
I close my eyes time for sleep.

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That Ngon Luc Bat

Leny Roovers

Refrain

It has been so long ago
Since I felt the flow of love
From you, it's getting rough
Life is becoming tough this way

When will come the day at last
It must be getting fast, my dear
This waiting I do fear
That much that should be clear to you

We haven't got a clue as yet
The date needs to be set I think
Or I'll be on the brink
Of madness, with a wink I write

Because my heart is light and warm
Can weather any storm or rain
That's why I say again
This often sung refrain you know.

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Work

Phones keep ringing in my ear
Sounds I hate to hear do shout
I don't want this, I want out!
This noise is just too loud for me.

I need to be free a while
Rid myself of bile and stress
To be out of this mess
To be with you, no less I ask

Weary of this task, I am
Of this daily jam I'm in
Causing my head to spin
And ache, this awful din I fear.

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